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shadowprophet
235 Posts
9 years, 7 months ago
I'm an Edgar Allan poe fan, and a Halloween fan.

This year thought Id honor poe with a poe style poem that took me a while and several drafts to compose.

Be burtal. Poe would :p

I’ve enraged traumatic furry, Deaths dark dead hand, is now my jury,
With many restraints, in various numbers, He even chained me to the floor!
As I ranted, nearly raving, my blood runs cold, Deaths death hand raising!!

Charged with crimes and sins, that could chill you, to the very core.
screams and cries for justice echo, in every hallway, on every floor.
Crystal clearly I remember, I blazed that place to coals and ember!!

Each separate flying Sparkle, shining ,like endless flames on a brilliant firey shore.
I think , sometimes I do feel sorrow!, It's true!!!, If only, I could borrow,,,,,, time....
Deaths dark dead hand does claim,,,,, another more...
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    ruthkeith
    4 Posts
    9 years, 4 months ago
    Very nicely written! Loved it!
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      9 years, 4 months ago
      May want to change the spelling of fury. It's making me think of poorly drawn anthropomorphic beasts beating on you.
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        thecrow174
        9986 Posts
        9 years, 4 months ago
        You may want to capitalize "Poe" too.
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          stake_n_sheak
          1891 Posts
          9 years, 4 months ago
          and burtal
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            RetroxBunny
            1987 Posts
            9 years, 4 months ago
            AND replace the commas with periods in the fourth paragraph.


            Just teasing. I read some of Edgar Allan Poe's poetry a couple weeks ago, so I got to say yours is pretty good! Do continue writing!
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              stake_n_sheak
              1891 Posts
              9 years, 4 months ago
              RetroxBunny
              Edgar Allan Poe's poetry


              Edgar Allen Posetry
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