- 5 years 8 months ago
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Hi guys. I've submitted 2 articles, none of which did very well. But I'm hoping to make that up with a review of one of my favorite bad movies, Legend Of 8 Samurai.
Here's what I've got so far:
PLOT----------
A 100 year old demon spawn by the name of Motofuji & his mother has killed & gathered together the heads of the Sotomei clan leaders to appease to THE ETERNAL SPIRIT.
But one head is missing, that of the lovely Princess Seju, Lord Sotomei's only daughter.
Why you ask? Well, a long time ago their castle was burned down by the Sotomei clan & Motofuji's face was horribly burned. S
ince that day, Motofuji's mother placed a curse on the Sotomei clan leaders that they might suffer misery & all the leader's daughters have had their faces ripped to shreds so that Motofuji's face could be grafted back to it's original luster.
After her bodygaurds are murdered ( one of them pretending to be her), Princess Seju encounters Dosetsu & Dicoku, who are descendants of her family's retainers ( whatever that is). At night, the Dosetu explains why the Princess' family is cursed by means of a scroll painted by his late grandfather:
" About a hundred years ago, our ancestors, lead by Lord Yoshizani, raided the castle of Sarakhani Hekita.
the reason for this was that Sarakhani was infatuated with the wicked Tomasusa ( Motofuji's Mom) & so therefore the heavily taxed farmers begged Lord Yoshizani to rise up & supress Sarakhani & the Hekita clan.
Sarakhani was quickly beheaded when they caught him, but the wicked Tomasusa put a curse on all those present with her last dying breath.
Soon after that Sotomei's castle was attacked by another clan. As his castle was about to fall, Lord Yoshizani saw the family dog nearby.
" Bring me the head of my enemy," he joked, " & I will give you the hand of Princess Fushi."
That night, the dog brought back the head of his enemy.
We won the battle finally, but even though it was a joke made in dispair, a great lord's word always has to be honored.
So the Princess gave herself to the dog & she left the castle together with it.
Our ancestors were very unhappy with everything that had happened to Princess Fushi, so they sent soidlers to try & kill the dog.
The Princess tried to shield the dog & in doing so, she herself was shot by the soidlers.
At this moment, 8 round crystals flew out of the Princess' body. And then she began to speak:
" Do not grieve over my passing. In a hundred years, the crystals will become men of great stature & they will serve a Sotomei Princess & overcome the curse. I was destined to live & die only for this purpose."
The Dosetsu then gives Princess Seju the flute that Princess Fushi used to calm the dog & then him & Dicoku both show the Princess their crystals that they were both born with.
But being only 2 of the 6, the trio has the grave task of finding the others.
And with Dosetsu having an illness that will cause him to die within the month, they'll have to act fast if they want to finish of th Hekita clan for good & end the curse.
This is my outline for the article:
Intro
Plot
Interesting Scenes
WTF Scenes
Final Analysis
I just wanted to see if I was going into the right direction so I dive in head first & get discouraged when my article doesn't show up on the main page.Are you sure you want to delete this post? Yes | No 
- 5 years 8 months ago
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It seems good so far. Just make sure you write the article in your own words instead of just cutting and pasting from another site. Use plenty of pictures to explain what you're talking about, why you like the movie, the history behind the movie, yada, yada, yada. I'm not sure how popular samurai flicks are with most folks on retrojunk, but even if your article doesn't get 6000 thumbs up, writing what you like is the important thing. http://www.thespacesheriffblog.com/Are you sure you want to delete this post? Yes | No 
- 5 years 8 months ago
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For a first statement I completely agree with the above post. Write about what you like. Don't concern yourself too much with the score. On a technical note:
The plot seems pretty good. The above guy already mentioned some hints on how to appeal to the Retrojunk audience. I looked at the other articles you mentioned and noticed a couple of things:
Spelling mistakes: E.G "since that day" and "bodyguard." Both examples taken from the excerpt you just presented. Make sure to run a spelling checker through you article before submitting it.
Division of paragraphs: Especially in The Lost Animorphs Parody I noticed a lot of paragraphs existing just of two sentences. A paragraph is a compilation of a number of things concerning the same subject. Try do divide your paragraph by that standard. It makes the article easier to read (then again, don't make the paragraphs too long).
Placement of pictures: Try to spread your pictures evenly among an article, The animorph article is especially guilty of this. There are a couple of pictures in the first section then it runs empty. Pictures keep interest ergo divide your pictures to prevent skimming through an article.
Incorrect coding: I noticed that the Morgs, My Hero article had a fault in the coding of pictures. Don't forget to add the / in the code when ending the code of the picture (check the writer's faq if this is still unclear).
I'm not an expert when it comes to writing articles but maybe this should help. Good luck!Latest article: http://www.retrojunk.com/details_articles/7494/Are you sure you want to delete this post? Yes | No
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