• Celeste
    • 7 years 2 months ago
    • Posts: 963
    		 And don't use that tired old "Gobots Suck and Transformers Rock" shit. It's got to be a real reason why you guys hated it. I got -2 and I want to know the real reason why?
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    • System
      • 7 years 2 months ago
      • Posts: 74809
      		 I never said I hated it. And it had nothing to do with the screencaps. The article on a whole just didn't feel too inspired. Yes, you brought up some classic cliche's like kidnapping, the whole bad guy plan speech, ect. But stuff like the catch phrase just didn't sit fully with me. Megatron yelling 'attack' is just that. I don't don't see it as a catch phrase as much as it is command. I honestly don't see Megs yelling "Get em, boyos!" Now that, I'd consider a catch phrase.

      Overall its a great idea and concept, just needed a little more work.
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      • Knites
        • 7 years 2 months ago
        • Posts: 180
        		 The back pages again, Celeste? That's too bad. I can see you put some effort into this latest piece. I really appreciate the fact you keep trying to make better and better articles, but you need to consider something.


        For a reader to believe something to be "cliche" it has to be shown to occur in a number of shows, not just one show (i.e. GoBots). However, you only give one show per section so you leave too much up to the reader to remember. It would have been wiser to discuss/show how the "viscious interrogation" has occured in three or four different shows (e.g. TMNT, Megaman, Jason and the Wheeled Warriors, Gobots, take your pick) and provide evidence (a picture or a detailed episode scene explanation). This way, you would have been more successful convincing your readers that your topics are truly reoccurring and, hence, cliche.

        The weakness in your articles is, and always has been, your extremely low amount of support/convincing facts. You never back up what you say with enough outside proof. You just write your opinions with no proof or very, very little and hope we believe you.

        Remeber your Teletoon article? You GUESSED the reason for why Teletoon fell instead of actually looking it up and learning the truth. I had to do that for you. It took me two minutes on Wikipedia, two minutes you should have spent.

        Remember your article "Animation to Live Action 2? You ranted about a dozen movies, but relied only on your unsubstantiated opinions. Had you provided some quotations from reviewers from different movie review sites that agreed with you, your arguments might have been stronger.

        You want your articles to survive, do your research before writing your articles and show this research in your work.


        What you need is a B-reader. This is some one who does not love, but also does not hate the stuff your writing about. This person might also be someone who knows nothing about your topic at all. If these people can read your article, understand it, and enjoy it, if they don't walk away from your piece clueless or scratching their heads, then your piece is ready to be posted.

        If you can't get a B-reader, always try to write your articles for someone with ALMOST NO KNOWLEDGE of your topic. This often helps.

        Oh, by the way, the "cliches" you talk about in your article might have been better described as "overused plot devices".

        Good luck on your next piece.
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